Delete: Dear Mr Rat - a Poem.
Posted: Wednesday, April 29, 2009
by Connor Davidson
The idea behind this poem is that it is a fictional corespondance between an rat and a human. The poem should tell you someting about us as humans...
Dear Mr Rat,
Excuse me Mr Rat you are in my way,
Oh, what is that you say?
This is what you do every day?
Dear Mr Human,
I do not like your attitude,
I think it rather shrewd.
For all I wish to do,
Is live alongside you?
Dear Mr Rat.
Mr Rat you are on my land,
And I say you are banned.
For cities, are a human's land,
Dear Mr Human.
You are the top dog,
Yet you act more like a stupid frog.
What do you gain,
From others pain?
Why be so mean,
To us your are most obscene,
Now you see,
It is this I plea -
Grow up and start to consider me.
Connor Davidson 04/29/09
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More commentsThis poem was very interesting, and I agree with Sandra about how there always someone underneath us.For all we know, another animal may be more intelligent than us, but don't show sign of it...I wonder what would happen if an alien came along and became the dominant species.Thanks for the comment.
Connor, your writing is fresh and fantastic! Keep going!!Thanks for the comment.
I really like this poem, except for the fact a rat wants to coexist with me. I dislike rats immensely. Not only rats, but their cousins with wings, pigeons. Rats and pigeons are two reasons to buy dynamite. . .Seriously, though, this is a well done piece. Thanks for sharing.I know people hate rats. I thought the tittle "dear mr rat" would catch peoples attention. Rats don't have the concept of living with us as they are unintelligent. However, we should have the concept but don't. Thant was what I was trying to convey.Thanks for the comment.
Connor, very impressive. It flowed nice and brings a lot of thoughts to mind. Excellent job! Blessings to you my fellow human being :-) TeresaWOW. It has been years since someone said I was human! Everyone just calls me a robot.Thanks for the comment.From where I sit, definitely human - you have a lot of interesting things to say regarding many areas of everyday life. How much more human can someone be :-)
Connor,This is brilliant!Well done.NenitaThanks for the comment.
The human sounds a lot like many people I know. Good job.The human was to represent the human race in general.Thanks for the comment.
Gosh, a lot of food for thought with very few crumbs, Connor. We certainly do step on anything that gets in our way!Well done.NancyI agree totally...Thanks for the comment.
Also, we should stop thinking we're the smartest thing in the galaxy, because for all we know we could be one of the dumbest.I see... what is aliens came and treated us like we treat animals?
Nice piece, enjoyed it and made me think a bit...which for me is a good thing--thanks for writing it.SteveThanks for the comment.
Interesting poem, I enjoy poetry. Mr Rat has a good point. We really do need to grow up.Are you sure? Two stars does not reflect this.I must not understand the rating I thought I gave you a 4? HmmmFair enough, I apologise. I am used to people coming along and rating articles one or two stars when everyone else rated them 5.Thanks for the comment anyway.
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